Criticize my work? (: please!?

You wrote "I was four years old when both of my parents died by a drunk driver." That is where I stopped. Fix it. The parents weren't BY the drunk driver when they died, the parents were KILLED by the drunk driver. Or "my parents died DUE to a drunk driver, just don't use by it doesn't sound right. If you want anymore help with grammar and stuff like that email me. jake.schires@gmail.com